Board Thread:Fanmade/@comment-39214449-20190422161920/@comment-35564842-20190812224819

(Critique time:

Appearance: I like the whole thing about the stand and user having the same outfit just different colors but I feel like more variety is needed. For example you could have his shirt be open with some blue shirt underneath or some holes in the suit with yellow under them, just anything except all black and all white. The face having no features except for a mouth seems odd to me. Why not just have the face be completely blank or give it stand eyes too(unless it’s a reference then ignore this). I like the detail of it always grinning though. I feel like it looking a normal human/mannequin thing is a bit boring. The idea I got in my head was a humanoid figure with small, muscular legs and a large torso with short muscular arms that have ginormous hands it uses to hold the items during the “birthing” process.

Personality: Something I see that feels wrong here. I don’t think the users personality and stand match. I don’t think a loner who acts all edgy like you made him when you were 14 would have a constantly grinning stand with a fucking fedora. The fedora and suit and the grinning give me the idea of someone confident, extravagant, someone that likes to show off (which could also work with the mannequin face since they’re made to show off fashion). Since the users ability is described as a “child” and the objects that make it up as “parents” maybe you could do something similar to Caesar where he has a strong love and respect for his family/parents. Araki usually makes a stand and then builds the user based on what kind of person would have that stand. Don’t come up with them separately, always base one off the other.

Power: I like it. In my head I’m imagining it holding two items and then in a flash the fusion appears in front of him. I think it’s interesting how it fuses the effects of the item so a pillow would mix with steel and become as hard as steel but as soft as a pillow. No complaints there. I like the weakness of it needing two items to make an object.

Also what’s the point of writing down the user skills if he has none?

Criticism ended)