Board Thread:Fanmade/@comment-38478843-20190226200532/@comment-35564842-20190313175211

Also I realized that removing the fire part would be odd but the second advice still stands. I also have some more criticisms:

1. Remove the quotes. None of the other characters have quotes and the ones you have don’t fit your character. He’s supposed to be EIGHT so why would he talk like that!?

2. The weakness you gave doesn’t make sense. Why would it need to be something related to the user? I like the accelerated aging part but you don’t need it to be part of the ability. It could just be that he once got the fire on himself or something.

3. Just make him the head of resources instead of the son of him. Age doesn’t matter if it’s life or death. He may be eight but he’s generous and has a perfect ability for the head of resources.

4. It should have an E in power. It’s not a combat stand and just like Diablo it causes no harm.

5. Why not just have the stand be the staff. What’s the point of a humanoid form if it uses an item as its only ability. Just make it a stick and why not make the user visually really old.

6. Most of the time stand items have English words on them. The only one I can think of with a kanji is Rolling Stones and I feel like the word FIRE written on it in a more linear pattern would work better and show that he’s kind and pacifistic rather than chaotic.

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